I appreciate that you're starting t odevelop properly now and living your own life and all that. It's great, really, I enjoy it... but a few things.
a. PLEASE WAIT YOUR TURN! I know you're head over heels for the FMC, and it's great because you're supposed to be, but you're also supposed to wait before asking her to marry you. You're rushing my story along faster than it should've been going! Cut it out!
b. I know you worry about your friend. But when did you become so inquisitive? You're a spoiled crown-prince, you shouldn't care this much about your servant, evne if he's bonded to you through magic. I beg of you, cease your investigations into the strange events, please! He needs ot figure this out on his own, or the sotry will be entirely too easy!
c. That protective streak? It's good, keep it up, just... try not to make the FMC terrified of your moods, alright? The other guy is supposed to be the one to end up scaring her and then she's supposed to come to the palace for comfort. Okay? She's hardly going to look you lot up if you keep freaking her out! Her not being scared of you might also make her more inclined to MARRY YOU! Since now he basic reactio nto the news was "Do not want!"
d. You're supposed ot be in your twneties. Whipe that smirk of your face and stop grinning like a 16 year old who just lost his virgnity, 'kay?
Your author.
On the uphand, word count is skyrocketing despite novelhate.


